Before I write this review, I would like to say that I am not an animator and have absolutely no idea how long this took to make. I just have spent a long time observing what is good in content and what is not as definite. I'm sorry that I sound extremely hypocritical writing this review, I just want to see you grow as an artist on NG. You know, clean the portal up for good content. I do realize that this is your first submission on NG, but there are a few things that still need to be cleared up:
Plot- An animation should have a clear and definite point to it. This "point" is in the theme. Themes are portrayed through the cycle of an exposition, conflict and conclusion. There are many sub categories under this, but most animations flow with this pattern. The exposition should come gradually, and shouldn't be smudged within 4 lines of dialogue. There wasn't an apparent conflict that had any emotional meaning. There wasn't enough for the viewer to have any emotional feeling for the characters. The conflict did come very soon. In my opinion, I feel like there wasn't a satisfying conclusion.
Voice acting- You did say that the voice acting was sub par, but I didn't exactly hear what was being said. I'm sure this is due to the microphones you have to use in thee first place, but adding an extreme amount of diction may have patched up a few problems.
Backgrounds- This was actually not too bad. I do enjoy it when people put "Easter Eggs" inside the background, like the scene when the emo goes to the secret lair. The backgrounds were very well thought with the color scheme. Well done in this area!
For a first animation, it is generally ok to put out content like this. I would just like to point out a few areas that could use some work.